Title: The Stupid Dare
Author: Justme-
Story link: click
Review by: Littlemisshappy
Title: 5/5
Your title is interesting and there’s no grammatical error.
Appearance: 7/10
Poster: You have two posters. The first one was a bit too big but it was nice and the background (of the poster) suited your story. Your second poster was too plain.
Background: It was okay.
Foreword/description: 11/15
Description: You described the story well. It makes your reader wondered what will happen.
Foreword: It was well written, the characters and such. Here’s some mistake;
Wrong: passed awy at a car accident.
Correct: passed away by a car accident.
Why: Spelling mistake and the usage of preposition.
Wrong: a job for inheritance.
Correct: a job for income.
Why: Wrong usage of word.
Plot/Originality: 16/20
Got to new school, kingkas are interested in you…they played truth or dare, involving you…he tried to make you fall in love with him (which I don’t see he flirted with ~~~~ at all, he’s just being kind and ~~~ falls in love with him), he falls in love with ~~~ too, some bitch trying to get in line, the third person settled it, happy ending?
Common but interested. You can add more twist and turn to make it more interesting though.
Spelling/Vocabulary/Grammar/Punctuation: 24/30
I’m just going to point out your mistakes on chapter 1. Because you tick the disallow text selection, making me hard to point it out.
Wrong: to see those ladies are fighting for him.
Correct: to see those ladies fought for him.
Why: Tense consistency!
Wrong: “That’s just 1, look at mine,”
Correct: That’s just one, look at mine,”
Why: Use letters instead of numbers when writing in a formal form.
Wrong: You just thank him…
Correct: You just thanked him…
Why: Tense consistency.
Wrong: you hurriedly grab your backpack…
Correct: you hurriedly grabbed your backpack…
Why: Tense consistency.
Wrong: “I didn’t know you studied here!”
Correct: “I didn’t know you study here!”
Why: Soojin is studying at the school right?
There is some other more but I have school and have no time to re-write your mistakes to correct you! Those are found in chapter 3.
Writing Style: 5/5
I love your writing style. Wasn’t messy and very easy to understand, you know, no point of view (POVs) and such…
Flow: 6/10
It was kind of too fast. I don’t if it just me or what, but I wanted to see more on how Jinyoung melt her heart…but then yeah, she was already in love with Jinyoung.
Overall enjoyment: 4/5
I did enjoy it a bit.
Total: 78/100
Reviewer’s note: lol, some mark as before isn’t it? You should watch your tense consistency and your sentence structure. Other than that, you‘d make an excellent writer. Congrats on winning! :D
